I like atmosphere as much as anyone. But if every line leans on mood and none of it nails the concrete source of conflict, the pitch starts dissolving in your hands.
Give readers longing, sure. Also give them the actual problem.
I like atmosphere as much as anyone. But if every line leans on mood and none of it nails the concrete source of conflict, the pitch starts dissolving in your hands.
Give readers longing, sure. Also give them the actual problem.